A Tall Promise

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“My door will always be open for you. Promise!”, he said looking purer than untrodden snow.

It warmed her heart.

On a dark day of her life, she took a taxi to the address he had given. The neighbourhood didn’t look promising. It was not that the grass was not greener…there was no grass for miles.

Undaunted, hopeful, she got out paying the hefty taxi fare, emptying her purse.

“The door is so high! How can I get in? Help!”, she pleaded, shivering, seeking safety, still hoping.

“It’s your problem, you don’t measure up”, he said coldly from above.

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The above 100 word story is written in response to the 100 word photo challenge posted by Rochelle Wisoff-Field each week. Photo prompt copyright Lauren Moscato.

Click on the InLinkZ link below to read other amazing takes, that fellow Friday Fictioneers have, on the same photo prompt.

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43 responses to “A Tall Promise

  1. Isn’t that always the way? I loved the slightly surreal aspect to this. Well done.

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  2. Oh, how cruel an ending.

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  3. Loved the ending and the take on the prompt ansumani. Well done 🙂

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  4. Cruel trick! I would give her some rope, but he doesn’t deserve to have her come up.

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  5. B@$tard. Great story though.

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  6. I hope she finds a man who doesn’t have a reason to shut anyone out.

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  7. More like – he’s way too creepy – get the hell outa there! Enjoyed your story.

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  8. Such an odd twist of fate that fits in so well with the image of the door out of reach.Plays to a whole multitude of human fears. Don’t ever try to make this one into a musical!

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  9. Ooh, cruel!
    I love the idea that the grass wasn’t only “not greener”, there wasn’t any grass at all – a clever way to describe the neighbourhood.

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  10. there are always unforeseen twists

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  11. I agree with Alistair; you’ve described the neighborhood well. Now she needs to take immediate action and “get out of Dodge” while she can!

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  12. it could be a blessing in disquise. who knows what could have happened if she “measured up” and allowed to get in.

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  13. I love the descriptions: purer than untrodden snow, no grass at all, and the door too high to get in– someone is too full of himself. That guy is no loss, but in such desperation, that’s not much help. Great story.

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  14. Seemed a little like a Rapunzel story in reverse.
    Someone up there needed to let down his hair…
    Randy

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  15. Oh no, she’s travelled all that way to see him and he treats her like that. What a cruel man. Great story. So life-like.

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  16. I’m remind of some alternate approaches that came to mind for this prompt (stilts, circus-cannon). I’ll rent one to her, if she wants to go get that bastard.

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  17. Francesca Smith

    The “you don’t measure up” can often be applied to people being dumped in relationships. In particular now that standards are increasing to unobtainable levels.
    A sad but wonderfully written story!

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  18. Has the feel of a modem surreal fairy tale. Great stuff.

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  19. PS I think I mean modern!

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  20. Ain’t that the way it is with offers too freely given!

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  21. Oooh! Nasty! He reeled her in then threw her back. This has an engaging fantasy feel to it. Well told.

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  22. Nicely done. I feel that there are many layers in this one, so when you read it again it is open to another interpretation.

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  23. It looks like the welcome mat was pulled out from under her. Ouch …!!!
    Cruel and painful …!!! Super story 😎

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  24. That was a tall and very empty promise. Well told.

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  25. Yes, it was a very cruel trick, but at least she’s found out what he’s really like and can keep well away in future. Well written.

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  26. Nicely do me it is dripping with cruelty and desperation.

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  27. What a loser–him not her! She’s a victim. It sounds like he has deep problems and needs to be checked off everyone’s list of friends. I hope she recovers from her problems and finds a real friend. Well done, Ansumani, especially the dialogue 🙂 — Suzanne

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  28. Dear Ansumani,

    I go with the general consensus. Time to find a new guy in a better neighborhood.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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