Searching through the narrow tunnels of gray
a memory arises, like a sliver of light piercing fog,
pushing aside the dark and dank:
gentle breezes,hair on tip-toe
deluge of drizzles, dizzily moist
fragrant earth, musky breath
flutter of butterflies, buttery fingers
velvety moss, finger-tip sparklers
benevolent sunshine, lukewarm inferno
Ah! the might of a stolen kiss!
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This picture at first sight took me to a dark place but the light at the end of the tunnel led me to the beginning of a tunnel: a hallway in my college, not very different from the picture in that it was long -dark-dank. At the end of that hallway ,during break, stood my boyfriend waiting for me, in front of the principals office…the best place to meet without generating gossip.
I struggled to recreate that romantic moment in words..maybe because we wanted to steal kisses but actually didn’t …or maybe because the moment belongs to a different lifetime…or maybe it was a dream and this boyfriend was just a figment of my imagination.
My boyfriend and I lost touch on the day of my marriage…one minute he was there looking deep into my eyes, the next he was lost in the crowd. I have never seen him since…I suspect my husband is holding him captive in a dark underground tunnel..
I dedicate this poem to my one and only boyfriend on the occasion of his recent birthday.
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This 56 word poem is written in response to the 100 word photo challenge posted by Rochelle Wisoff-Field each week.
Click on the ‘blue frog’ below to read other amazing takes, that fellow Friday Fictioneers have, on the same photo prompt:
Would it be unchivalrous of me to say that I liked your explanation better than your poem?
And in my opinion your husband is a lucky man, still looking into your eyes…
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It would be honest of you and honesty is chivalry. I did struggle with the poem so I’m not surprised.
And I keep reminding my husband, now and then, how unbelievably lucky he is 😉
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Nice, what a sweet memory
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Thanks!
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I liked that secret meeting mystery and how she thinks of her BF on his first birthday since her marriage. Could feel the desire and longingness. Good one!
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Thanks Parul!
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The poem is lovely! Engages all our senses in creating the memory. Sweet!
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Thanks Jan!
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Lovely memory and interesting true life in your explanation.
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Thanks Patrick!
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Beautiful poem! I loved the alliteration in the middle and the “butterflies” to “buttery”.
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Thanks Ali. I tried to get more alliteration and gave up .
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Dear Ansumani,
The poem is sweet. However your explanation of it at the end could easily qualify as your story as well. I enjoyed both.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle. I realized that the poem needed a story to prop it up. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Oh that story.. It gave the full strength to that poem. They are great when paired together.
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Thanks Bjorn….Trying to make that Poem stand-alone strong was a bit tough 🙂
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I found the poem beautiful. It speaks to the senses, the little memory snippets are very vivid and a sweet memory of young love. Combined with your explanation, it’s wonderfully romantic.
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Thank you!
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Fascinating poem and story, with some intriguing layers to it. I felt like I was being pulled into this whirlpool of feeling and thought as I read.
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Thank you! I was in a whirlpool of feeling so I’m glad you were able to experience it that way too!
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I agree. The poem was full of great description. The explanation at the end was like a story following it. I enjoyed both. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thanks Suzanne! Glad you enjoyed it.
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Dazzling use of the words.
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