The search

© 2015, Barbara W. Beacham

Finish the story begins with:  “He thought he found the perfect hiding spot.”

For all his darkness burning hot.

He thought he dug so deep a hole.

To bury all the hate in his bottomless soul.

He thought he sealed it with layers of resentment and pride.

Like cement mixed right.

He thought he built a façade for the world’s sake.

With charity and piety rendering it opaque.

He thought he was invisible amongst the herd.

The roar in his voice never to be heard.

It’s with that confidence he let me search his eyes on our first date.

I clapped with joy on finding the perfect soul mate.


The 93 word above poem like story was in response to ‘Monday’s finish the story’ flash fiction challenge. This unique flash fiction challenge  provides  a new photo each week, and the first sentence of a story. The challenge is to finish the story using 100-150 words, not including the sentence provided. Details are available here:


24 responses to “The search

  1. That is very well crafted. Excellent.


  2. Lovely poem, I am so envious of poets, such wordsmiths. Excellent!


  3. A powerful poem! Very well done Asumani! Thanks for adding this story to the list! Be well… ^..^


  4. Good poem. 🙂 I like the line ‘With charity and piety rendering it opaque.’ Nicely done.


  5. Great take on the prompt! Sounds like they’ll make the perfect (and a bit scary) couple.


  6. Good poem with great description, Ansumani. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne


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