A lost sole

PHOTO PROMPT © C.E. Ayr

Dear Ex,

We went through so much together;

You and me.

Through Hell; Through Heaven;

And everything in between.

All together,

As soul mates.

 

 

We were going places.

You and me.

Until you thought we were not made for each other.

That you were way better than me.

You said that I was a ‘nothing’ without you by my side:

Useless. Trash. You were right.

 

The last time I saw you, you said you had a lot more places to go.

You said I was holding you back.

Yesterday, I heard that you were found in a gutter…

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This less than 100 word story/letter was written in response to a 100 word photo challenge  posted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields each week.

Click on the ‘blue frog’  below to read other amazing takes on the same photo prompt:

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46 responses to “A lost sole

  1. Interesting take. Humorous on one side, very sad on the other.

    You said ,I was holding you back. (no comma needed)

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  2. Very sad indeed. I do feel sorry for both of them, though. Nicely done.
    (I’m not sure that heaven and hell should be capitalized in this context.)

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  3. Loved the ending and the matter-of-fact tone of the letter which somehow intensifies the feelings it is trying to downplay.

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  4. Good riddance to the ex by the sound of it, after all the nasty things they said. I liked the letter/poem format, and clever title 🙂

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  5. A nasty attack of “grass is greener” syndrome.
    Good piece.

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  6. Great title. I want to know more though!

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    • Thanks …I wanted to write more too and maybe would have if not for that word count limit.

      One closing option:
      “Looks like you are a ‘nothing’ without me by your side too. ”

      Second was to continue and add to the above:

      “We can still be something together.
      You and me.

      Want to come back? ”

      But the main theme of the story is the sense of mutual loss – not forgiveness or vindictiveness and I didn’t want to add anything that would take away from that.

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  7. Beautifully written !!! Very Insightful 🙂

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  8. Deep emotions clearly stated.

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  9. i wonder if they found him wearing woman’s shoes. that would explain it.

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  10. Oh.. I think sometimes that is an end for those that are searching for new pastures…

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  11. Interesting, so who was truly holding who back? Or safe?

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  12. That’ll teach him (or her). I like how you’ve structured this and I like the voice.

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  13. An interesting take on the prompt! Quite a lot of sadness and bitterness in there. A fitting end.

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  14. Wow…and I was waiting for the cue…on how you will relate it to the prompt. loved it…

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  15. somehow i loved the story

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  16. There’s a peg-legged woman somewhere who only needs one shoe. Don’t know if it’s a left or right foot that needs shod. If you hurry, you can still catch her. She doesn’t move too fast.

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  17. Dear Ansumani,

    I love the play on words withe sole and soul. He certainly was ‘going places’ wasn’t he. The gutter’s a place. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  18. What a good thing they split up when they did!

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  19. This was wonderful. I got the separation between soul and sole and it gave me a good chuckle. And seen from the other side, it made me sad (but the chuckle won.) What a creative idea, too.

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  20. Loved the play on words. So often one thinks the other is holding him/her back when, with a little sharing, might find a partner for life!

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  21. I liked the style and the tone.
    Clever and well done.

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  22. The story has sole

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  23. Really makes me wonder what happened to the person who thought he/she was so superior. Really well done!

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  24. I always enjoy an interesting perspective.

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  25. Well, I guess that was a wrong decision. Great twist at the end. — Suzanne

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