Through Darkness…

 

PHOTO PROMPT © CEAYR

 

earthworms tunnel- through

darkness -salt diamonds shimmer

wind ripples through light

Alternate ending line:

earthworms tunnel- through

darkness -salt diamonds shimmer

wind’s touch ,light’s ripples

 

—end—

Which ending do you like?

This 17 syllable Haiku  was written for the 100 word photo challenge. More details about this challenge can be found at:

https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2016/05/04/6-may-2016/

PHOTO PROMPT © CEAYR

Click on the Froggy below for other amazing takes on the same prompt by fellow “Friday Fictioneers.”

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29 responses to “Through Darkness…

  1. Wonderful.
    I like the ‘wind ripples through light’. 🙂

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  2. I, too, like the first one better. Wind ripples through light has something uplifting.

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  3. Nice haikus! I like the first one better though. It flows better for me.

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  4. Yup, The first one

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  5. Yeah I have to agree, I love the first one! 😃

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  6. A Haiku and a bonus Haiku too! Contrary to others I like the second one. I like “wind’s touch” 🙂

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  7. I kind of like that alternate ending. Not that it reads better but because it “experiences” better, if that makes any sense. Stronger feelings, I think.
    I love me some haiku. Thanks for this!

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  8. I like the first one better.

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  9. i like the first one better. 🙂

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  10. I like the second one, but that is my opinion, and everyone has one of those.

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  11. It’s the first one for me.

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  12. Dear Ansumani,

    I’m torn. I like both lines but I think I’m partial to the second. I like the idea of the light rippling. Either way, nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Dear Rochelle, I was torn too when writing and couldn’t make up my mind on which Haiku to keep and which Haiku to delete . But since I was way within the 100 word limit I decided to let the readers decide for me 🙂

      Thanks for reading.

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  13. I like “wind ripples through light”. It has a better flow in my opinion. Well done, Ansumani. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  14. Lovely! And I like the first one more.

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